The Aelf's Bloggery: December 2006

“I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by.” Douglas Adams (1952-2001) British Author

Let's start with a little brag for me. Did I mention (again) that my short story, Granny O-Toole’s Recipe, will be published online December 7th at A Long Story Short? Ha, Well it, plus an article I wrote about the writers forum I belong to is now published online. Be sure to read them. Their website is http://www.alongstoryshort.net/ .

Next: here’s an article I ran across in my surfing sessions that I think is a good one for us newbie writers. Dialogue! I’m passing it along with thanks to Writers Relief. Enjoy, and Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays to all. Thanks for a wonderful year, see ya in 2007, Aelf

DO’S AND DON’TS OF DIALOGUE

One of the toughest tasks for a new writer is mastering the art of writing effective dialogue. It sounds easy enough—just add some quotation marks and write down that conversation between your characters! But it’s not always easy to write realistic conversation, and poorly written dialogue can sabotage even the most clever and engaging novel or short story.

Dialogue sets the tone and scene of the story, revealing the personalities within the characters and creating dramatic intent. Well-written dialogue should stimulate the reader’s curiosity or create tension. It should move the story along, rather than bogging it down. And it should provide important information without sounding mechanical or forced. The trick is to convey a natural, realistic conversation while loading your dialogue with meaning, rather than wasting words on mundane exchanges.

"Hi, Laura. How are you?" asked Bob.

"Hi, Bob. I am fine," said Laura.

"That’s good to hear," said Bob.

You get the drift. Not only is the dialogue bereft of any meaning, insight, or pertinent information, but the speech tags (he said, she said) are boring and repetitive. And this idle chatter, while realistic, is a waste of the reader’s time.
Better to create some tension:

"Hi, Laura. It’s been a while! How have you been?"

"Oh, Bob, I didn’t see you..." Laura mumbled.

Laura didn’t answer Bob’s question, possibly implying that things are not well. She sounds distracted, causing the reader to wonder what’s on her mind. Using a little subtext allows your readers to discover meanings that aren’t laid out in black and white for them, reducing the possibility of boredom. Dialogue should be realistic but more revealing than everyday chatter between real people.

Dialogue between characters can also be used to present some history or backstory to the reader. Rather than relying solely on narration, let the characters reveal what you’re trying to tell the reader, and it’ll be a lot more interesting. Make it natural, however, or it will read something like this:

"Oh, Edith! It’s so good to see you! I heard your husband went to prison for killing his secretary’s husband. And they were having an affair, too, right? It must be hard to be forty years old and living in Chicago all alone, especially now that you’ve been laid off from work!"

This one-sided interchange is obviously designed to give the reader as many details as possible in a single paragraph, but it’s an awkward and transparent ruse. Give the characters time to interact, and allow details of their personalities and the plot to come through gradually...and naturally.

Speech tags (he said, she said) are often unnecessary and can clutter up your dialogue. If you’ve clearly defined your characters, the reader will already be able to identify the speaker. You can be a bit creative with the speech tags you do use, but be careful not to overdo it and draw attention to them. The dialogue itself should be the focus. Experiment with the rhythm of your sentences: vary the placement of speech tags or intersperse action instead.
"Laura, it’s so good to see you!"

"Er...you too, Bob," replied Laura, a bit less enthusiastically.

"I haven’t seen you around much. Have you been out of town?"

"No." Laura placed her hand on Bob’s forearm. "In fact, Bob, I’m afraid I’ve been avoiding you."
And avoid redundancy, which often means eliminating adverbs:

"I am furious with you!" she cried furiously.

"Me? Why, I’m the one who ought to be furious!" he replied indignantly.

Finally, read your dialogue out loud, eliminating the narration and speech tags. Does it sound natural and realistic? Dialogue should sound like people talking together, although, as the author, you have eliminated the normal stutters, pauses, "er’s" and "ummm’s" that often plague real speech. Consider the following:

"Mikey, you just have to get out of here. Julio’s gang will be here any minute."

"I know, man, but I cannot just run away. That would be cowardly."

"Cowardly, yes. But would you rather die?"

Would two gang members really speak this way? If it doesn’t sound realistic to you, it won’t sound good to your reader, either. And that’s who you need to impress.

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Sites to see, places to go, freebies to try and groups to join

MyWriting Friend:mailto:writingfriend@yahoo.com

Nick Daws Writers Circle:Click link on this page.

Writing Workshop: http://sff.onlinewritingworkshop.com/

Newbie Writers: http://www.newbiewriters.com/

Writers Prompts: http://writingfix.com/

Duotrope Digest:http://www.duotrope.com/digest.

Beginners Guide:http://www.beginnersguide.com/freelance-writing/

A Long Story Short: http://www.alongstoryshort.net/

E Literary Agent: http://www.e-literaryagent.net/